First of all, awesome paper! It was organized really well which made it easy to follow and easy to read. The color of those charts also added to my enjoyment of this paper so thanks for that! Most of my comments are pretty nit-picky because you really did a great job putting in all the information you needed so great work! One comment I have is regarding the Introduction and Methods sections. Overall, they were really detailed and well written. I would change the last paragraph of the introduction to more clearly state what other researchers did not focus on in this research. You did a good job stating this information broadly, but I would add in more specific wording to hit the reader over the head with it. Also, do the same thing with stating what your question is so that the reader knows exactly what you were studying. In your methods, I would add some more detail to the participants section about where you found these participants/how they were selected. Also, I think we need to conduct a few interviews so add that information into the participants section and also into your results. In your discussion section, you did a great job summarizing the data and analyzing the possible limitations to your study but did not mention anything about implications of the study or future research that could be done. Add in a paragraph for each of those at the end of the paper and you should be good!
First of all, awesome paper! It was organized really well which made it easy to follow and easy to read. The color of those charts also added to my enjoyment of this paper so thanks for that! Most of my comments are pretty nit-picky because you really did a great job putting in all the information you needed so great work!
ReplyDeleteOne comment I have is regarding the Introduction and Methods sections. Overall, they were really detailed and well written. I would change the last paragraph of the introduction to more clearly state what other researchers did not focus on in this research. You did a good job stating this information broadly, but I would add in more specific wording to hit the reader over the head with it. Also, do the same thing with stating what your question is so that the reader knows exactly what you were studying. In your methods, I would add some more detail to the participants section about where you found these participants/how they were selected. Also, I think we need to conduct a few interviews so add that information into the participants section and also into your results.
In your discussion section, you did a great job summarizing the data and analyzing the possible limitations to your study but did not mention anything about implications of the study or future research that could be done. Add in a paragraph for each of those at the end of the paper and you should be good!